Five Sentence Fiction...." Ruins "
Circumstance simply pulled them apart ignoring their every single plea .
Dejected dismayed they tried too hard to continue life’s journey .
Circumstance simply pulled them apart ignoring their every single plea .
Dejected dismayed they tried too hard to continue life’s journey .
Still a concealed desire lay deep down somewhere in their
minds preserved from the view of this judgmental world where they resided as
complete strangers again .
When fate dragged them together once more into an unplanned
outing to a historical fort with their friends.
Their eyes met and that hidden desire kindled hope
unwrapping their enshrouded love even amidst those old rugged ruins .
Well done, I loved the flow of this one
ReplyDeleteThank you...glad you liked it :)
DeleteLove triumphs even amidst ruins! :)
ReplyDeleteNice Sushree :)
Honest feelings do find a way someday ....Thank you :)
DeleteBeautiful lines, loved the third sentence :)
ReplyDeleteThank you...glad you loved that one :)
DeleteInteresting tale of finding old love among old ruins....nice!
ReplyDeleteThanks a lot...n ya an interesting line :)
Deleteoh good lord, concealed desires finally resurface :D
ReplyDeleteYa they did somehow :) Thank you ....
DeleteIt needed the ruins to bring back their love that was sliding towards ruin.
ReplyDeleteBeautiful line Sir ...thanks :)
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