He walked aimlessly on the streets unaware of his destination
With a
bottle in his hands he tried to quench his relentless thirst that disagreed to
replete
His jubilant
life had been snatched away in a moment of unpreparedness , throwing him out of the car
but engulfing his family within
Tears of
anguish marked it’s presence on his plump face
People were busy in some kind of festivity nearby
Dancing to tunes of the orchestra , a jovial old man pulled him in
“ Life is a
big celebration Son , let go what you can’t change and live it up without
regrets “
Word Count : 101 Words
Linking up this post with Friday Fictioneers with the above photo prompt .
Life is a celebration ... enjoy it :-D
ReplyDeleteI am not sure whether it is an occasion for celebration
ReplyDeleteMay be I should have mentioned about the occasion ....ok GP....will try to be more clear next time :)
ReplyDeleteLive it up sounds more like him coming out of failure....nevertheless a great post!
ReplyDeleteI kind of echo KP. I was a little confused on the occasion and the fact that he is 'celebrating' after his 'life is snatched away'?
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He isn't celebrating ...rather the celebration going on round the corner almost pulled the remorse man in..... asking him to move on with life....as what happened was not in his hands ....that's what I wanted to express .
DeleteSounds about right. I can almost see American author Ernest Hemingway there.
ReplyDeleteI don't have any words to reply to your comment .... Awe struck ....
DeleteVery sensible advice!!
ReplyDeleteHope you are having a great time reading, writing and connecting with fellow A to Zers, Sushree :)
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DeleteHave to admit to being a bit confused as well.
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May be I should have been bit more clear....will try to improvise ....
Deleteah.. what sadness.. but still the wisdom of Carpe Diem
ReplyDeleteoh...thank you so much :)
Deletethe protagonist came alive with your story-telling and the ending couldn't have been any better. with that said, a little bit more editing would have made your story perfect.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the advice , I did make slight changes in the write up
DeleteYour male protagonist has experienced a tragedy that defines his world, yet his tragedy does not register with the world around him. The juxtaposition of death and life was quite powerful.
ReplyDeleteGlad that you interpreted it so well ....thanks for dropping by :)
DeleteDear Sushree,
ReplyDeleteWelcome to Friday Fictioneers. A lot of story in few words. You clearly showed how the world goes on, oblivious to individual tragedy
I was confused in a few places but I sense it has to do with English not being your first language. For that alone you have my admiration.
I look forward to reading more from you.
Shalom,
Rochelle
Thank you Rochelle for introducing us with Friday Fictioneers .... Writing for FF and reading the posts of other writers is a great learning experience .
DeleteThanks for your appreciation as well as the suggestion . I will try to improve in my future write ups .
I think the only ambiguity came from this sentence "His jubilant life got snatched away.." which led to the confusion. But the philosophical ending was expressed beautifully.
ReplyDeleteYa may be...Thank you for pointing that out .....
DeleteSometimes perfect strangers, epsecially those of old and wise kind, give us best advice. We get caught in a web of our own sorrow and just miss on everyday beauty and simplicity of life. Great story and welcome to FF.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
DeleteLife snatched away - I wasn't sure if this was a ghost (that would be a fantastic way of starting if it was; I imagine ghosts' thirst is never sated). I found some of the wording a bit confusing but I liked the overall story.
ReplyDeleteAbout the confusion part ...many said the same ...may be I have gone wrong at few places . Would improvise that in my future write ups :)
DeleteGood story. Sad at the beginning, but good advice at the end. Good description of suffering. Well done.
ReplyDeleteThank you so much :)
DeleteI really liked this one-life has to go on and it does!The old man is right-he must learn to give up (the bottle) and (let go of) the grief-life is for
ReplyDeleteliving :-) Beautifully expressed-and very clear to me.
http://brewmeacuppa.wordpress.com/2014/04/09/the-promise/
I am glad you interpreted the story completely and understood it so well . Thanks a lot for that :)
DeleteMany said that they got confused , so I edited few parts ....may be now it's ok ...